Reading Times

4/18- read 45 min Grey Wolves, 4/19 read 50 min Grey Wolves, 4/20 read 50 min Grey Wolves, 4/21 portfolio 30 min

What do I want most...

Like many other people I have and still want a lot of things in this world. Some of them are political, some social, etc. But above all I always had this one dream in the back of my head that when I was little I always said it was the one thing I would ask a genie. It is something that I have a continuing dream for, even thought it will never come true.

My biggest want in the world is to have six special super powers. Now I'm not just going to choose powers that will allow me control of world domination, but they would be very useful to my day day life. My first power would be to be able to control water/ice with my hands/mind. Next I want to be able to have telekinetic powers, basically control things with my hands/mind no matter the size or weight (even myself.) Then I would like to freeze time. Good for last minute cramming before a test. Then I would also like to be able to turn myself invisible. Next I would like to be able to give life to any thing that has passed. Finally, I would like to control fire from my finger tips to my toes (basically like the dude from the fantastic four.)

So yeah, thats my biggest wish. I am very interested to read my peers biggest wants and desires and compare them to mine.

My Poem

Here is my fully improved poem. Hope you enjoy :)


Apple
So red and round
you fill up my world
So crisp, so clean
just like a brand new limousine
but besides the point, your more than that
your a inspiration to my world
as well as many other's
you've filled our tummies and
inspired laws. You've set the standard-
one apple a day- keeps the doctor away.
you stock our shelves and fill our hearts
you keep us strong
when we are weak
you make me feel happy when my world is bleak
like a bright sun on a warm day
apple
you are great.

In this poem I really wanted to include some alliterations and anaphoras to create a concrete symbolism of the apples symbolism. Finally, I also wanted to include some caesuras, similes, euphonies, and some connotations to get my point across in a unique way.


Reading times

Work on writing remix 45 min 4/9, read "Grey Wolves" by: Robert Muchamore 40 min 4/10, read "Grey Wolves" by: Robert Muchamore 30 min 4/11, read "Grey Wolves" by: Robert Muchamore 4/24 35 min

Reading Response

Reading Times: read- Grey Wolves by: Robert Muchamore 50 min 4/1/13, read Grey Wolves by: Robert Muchamore 65 min 4/3/13- read Grey Wolves by: Robert Muchamore 55 min 4/5/13 

Over the break I visited San Francisco, California to just hang out, do some surfing, and visit my cousin. But what I didn't plan for was to spend three of my valuable days in national parks that for one aren't even famous and two, aren't even a pleasure to look at.  

So as I result I knocked out a pretty decent amount of my book, even though I got car sick as a result of  it.  As I'm nearing the final chapters of my book I haven't help but noticed how there has not been one dull moment. Earlier in the book exciting moments came and went and were always followed by extremely slow, dull moments. Yet now every moment is action and when a certain event concerning one character is over, another intense moment is brewed up with a different character. 

I'm not too sure what to think of it. I don't know if I should prepare for an almost "great depression" in the book, or if I should I anticipate this action to continue. I know this author very well and based off my experiences I suspect a great depression because every action has to be followed by a falling action. Even though movies don't always follow this rule, its not too often a book is left on a suspenseful cliff hanger which forces the readers to wait till the next issue. Although there is another book in the series following this one so I won't have to wait. I still would never expect that of all things.

Song Reflection

Since I was completely out of ideas and had no clue what to pick I just decided to do "Umbrella" by: Rihanna. Although Rihanna is not my first choice in music, she is still a well rounded, accomplished musician and I enjoy her work. In her song "Umbrella" Rihanna makes rhythmic connections to rain and the sky in anticipation for the chorus and using these connections as hypothetical symbols for her and a person (Jay-Z) or for Jay Z to Rihanna. The lyrics corresponding to this technique are- "you know me, in anticipation for precipitation" "Stack chips for the rainy day" "because when the sun shines, we'll shine together" "Now that its raining more than ever, know that we still have each other, you can stand under my umbrella."

These techniques were used in perfect sequence. They didn't follow each other and cause the poem to sound repetitive. Nor were they too far apart that the listener lost track of the picture and the meaning of the lyrics.  Seeing the wording and effort put into the sentence fluency and organization of this song allows the fans to have a greater appreciation for the artist. This shows that when used properly the effects of these techniques result in a very well-balanced, noteworthy song that has and is sure to attract more fans.

Jane Goodall Plagiarism

When I first read of this is was throughly shocked. As a student in school we are beaten in the fact "DO NOT plagiarize." So to see a professional writer, and one with her age and knowledge, blatantly plagiarize like that shocks me. I first thought this was a serious matter. Then I reflected thinking "well she's just old and careless and maybe its just a mistake," but no. Any professional writer of any age or knowledge level, from children's books to textbooks, has no excuse to plagiarize. So I went deeper into my criticism.

One thing that really surprised me is her motivation to write this book. At first it seems to me that she is writing about chimps but the main topic sways from naturalist life style to nature and flowers. This to me was a red flag that showed carelessness. In my opinion I'm surprised she hasn't been sued yet. So my solution would be to edit and reprint the books. Then in the blank page that is reserved for dedications, give condolences to the sources, publishers, and the readers for her mistake.

Past Paper Reflection

For my reflection I will be using my Literary Analysis on the story "The Sniper." For my reflection I will be choosing two traits of good writing to focus on when re-evaluating my paper. The two that I have chosen are sentence fluency and word choice. Based on the comments I received from my peers and teachers, I feel that my choices will appropriately suit my paper's reflection.

The reason I chose these two elements is because after reviewing my comments and reading over my paper I felt that these were my weakest areas. Just in my first over-glance since submitting my paper I noticed things that needed to be revised that fell into thee two categories. Overall I thought I had a good paper, yet I see places were I could have inserted more couple wording and worded my sentences better. All in all I am actually a little bit excited to revise my paper again and hope everything turns out well.