Here is my fully improved poem. Hope you enjoy :)
Apple
So red and round
you fill up my world
So crisp, so clean
just like a brand new limousine
but besides the point, your more than that
your a inspiration to my world
as well as many other's
you've filled our tummies and
inspired laws. You've set the standard-
one apple a day- keeps the doctor away.
you stock our shelves and fill our hearts
you keep us strong
when we are weak
you make me feel happy when my world is bleak
like a bright sun on a warm day
apple
you are great.
In this poem I really wanted to include some alliterations and anaphoras to create a concrete symbolism of the apples symbolism. Finally, I also wanted to include some caesuras, similes, euphonies, and some connotations to get my point across in a unique way.
Reading times
Work on writing remix 45 min 4/9, read "Grey Wolves" by: Robert Muchamore 40 min 4/10, read "Grey Wolves" by: Robert Muchamore 30 min 4/11, read "Grey Wolves" by: Robert Muchamore 4/24 35 min
good job! You clearly have a talent for writing poems that I do not have. I like how you put the word apple on a line of its own to emphasize it.
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